Friday 25 January 2008

Task 15 B

This is an excellent focused introduction Nazi.

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- A clear, focused research on the background information on Asians in today’s society.

-The use of quotes linking to what you’re explaining was good as it backed up what you wre talking about in your topic sentences.

Ebi-
-maybe mention what awards it has been awarded...this may show the influence and the recognition the audience have on either the subject matter or even the success of the film.

- Also if you want you could show the success through box office veiwings it had in the opening weekend.

I can't really think of any more changes as it is straight to the point and focused... :)

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